A Woman in Bookstore
At the long table in a large bookstore, this woman was seated among many others. She was just an ordinary woman, maybe in her late 30s. She put on a black checked shirt. Also, she was wearing thick black glasses, tied her hair back with black hairband, and painted her nails black. Only thing that was not black was her silver earring on her left ear. She did not seem that neat, with her shirt cuffs unbuttoned. Maybe she had been sitting there for a long time, I thought.
It was a pile of books in front of her that caught my eyes. Unlike others who were reading only one book or two, she had five or six. The books were mostly about investment techniques. In addition, she was holding little pieces of paper, which were printouts directing the location of the books. At the back of those pieces of papers, she was keep writing something down in various colors. There were already about 10 pieces full of letters beside her books. It seemed that she was not reading the books thoroughly, but just scanning them and writing down important details. However, I could tell she had very good ability to concentrate, because she was never distracted even for a single moment by music being played or people talking. It was unlikely that she would buy those books, but at the same time, I could see her trying to keep the books as clean as possible. She seemed to be strong, especially in making a living, but also very caring not to harm anyone.
Moses Choi
Your story was short and neat. At first, the woman seemed a bit scary and mysterious because she was all black. It is interesting and unusual that she was scanning lots of books on a single topic.
ReplyDeleteI liked how you described her clothing in detail. You even made an inference about how long she had been there from close observation.
However, since the woman didn't have much actions other than reading books and taking notes, the story seemed too short and static. Adding more specific details about her face or her small actions would make your story more interesting to read.
201202334 Kweonho Lee
All of the description that you wrote about the woman was descriptive, except about her facial expression, Since she is the main focus of the story, I think it would be nice if you can add information about her facial expression. For example, was she smiling, frowning or had no facila expression at all?
ReplyDeleteOverall, I liked how your story was interesting and fun to read, It had a detailed description of the woman that you saw in the bookstore.
Hyun Jee Kim