Hyeonju Oh / 9th post /Tues 9-11 a.m.

1. Describe your own reaction to conducting this interview. Was it easy or difficult? Why? If you had a chance to do the interview over, what would you do differently?

The interview was easy. First of all, my younger brother usually at home recently because the Korea SAT was over. So I just opened the door and asked what I wondered about his life. Now I think that I was too rude. Because of this situation, my mother scolded me. Anyway I notified him that I'll use the interview in my essay and he agreed.


2. Read your essay aloud and listen to the sound of the words. If possible, audiotape your reading and then listen to the tape. What did you like the most about the essay when you heard it being read aloud in your own voice?

It allowed me to catch some grammar errors. And I was shamed and sad about poor pronunciation. I wondered why I am such a poor speaker. Reading aloud made my essay more realistic. It means that the interview is kind of story telling of one real human.


3. What else do you want readers to understand that is not yet included in your essay? Write out these new parts and decide how you can include them in the next draft to make your essay more complete.

There is nothing that I want to readers to understand. I asked the whole question that i want to ask and he answered sincerely. To make my essay more complete, I want to include much more specific descriptions about his room. I'm so poor at describing the scene. But I'm sure that it will helpful to readers to understand my brothers character.

Yukyung Bang/Ninth post/Narrative Composition Tuesday 09:00~11:00

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1. Describe your own reaction to conducting this interview. Was it easy or difficult? Why? If you had a chance to do the interview over, what would you do differently?

I thought it would be easy, but it turned out to be difficult. Because I interviewed my own sister, it was hard to keep a good listener's attitude. Also, as the interview went on, I had to add or skip the questions I had prepared in advance as her answers were much more different that I expected. If I do the interview over, I think I shouldn't prepare the questions expecting certain answers. And I would ask more detailed questions as too abstract ones can lead to an answer that does not correspond to the intention of the questions.

2. Read your essay aloud and listen to the sound of the words. If possible, audiotape your reading and then listen to the tape. What did you like most about the essay when you heard it being read aloud in your own voice?

What I liked the most when hearing my own essay being read aloud was that I felt how much I care for my sister. And there were parts that I did a good translation job of her answers and what she meant. 

3. What else do you want readers to understand that is not yet included in your essay? Write out these new parts and decide how you can include them in the next draft to make your essay more complete.

My essay was supposed to focus on the years for which we have not lived together and how much she grew mature and independent during that time. I included almost all of her answers in my essay, but I had to leave out how she became interested in the field of film because the essay became too long. In the next draft, I will figure out a way to include that information without making the essay too long. 

Moses Choi/ Writer's Plan for Revising/ Tues 9-11 a.m.

1. It was not difficult, but not easy either. Even after choosing a topic and the interviewee, it was little hard to think of the questions to ask, and decide which ones to ask. When actually conducting an interview, in many parts, it went differently from what I had expected. For example, the interviewee answered not the way I expected or predicted, or even she answered the questions that I prepared but not asked yet. If I am to do it again, I'd be more flexible with the preparation of questions, and also prepare some reserve questions.

 

2. Even though the interview did not go the way I predicted, the whole interview later turned out to be very consistent with one topic. Also, the topic was not even what I had in mind at the first place. Originally, my topic was 'getting a job in Korea', but it changed into 'getting a job in Korea AS AN WOMAN'. In that sense, I think it went well.

 

3. As I read it again, I found out that I barely described the interviewee herself. Maybe I could add some more detail about her facial expressions, tones of voice, gestures and poses, etc.

Do Hyun Lim/ Plans for Revision/ Narrative Composition/Tues. 9-11 a.m

1. Describe your own reaction to conducting this interview. Was it easy or difficult? Why? If you had a chance to do the interview over, what would you do differently?

The interview was more difficult than I expected. Even when done with a friend who is comfortable, the questions should be well prepared for it to go well and get sufficient information for a good essay. If I could do it over, I would not do much differently, but I could make the questions better now that I know the feeling of conducting an interview.

2. Read your essay aloud and listen to the sound of the words. If possible, audiotape your reading and then listen to the tape. What did you like most about the essay when you heard it being read aloud in your own voice?

I liked that I could get a different feel of my writing, more in the kind of a perspective of a third-person. It also reminded me of the interview, as if I was hearing the interviewee's voice because there were lots of quotes.

 

3. What else do you want readers to understand that is not yet included in your essay? Write out these new parts and decide how you can include them in the next draft to make your essay more complete.

I could add more detail about the excitement the interviewee felt when he was able to buy things he always wanted. There are also words may be considered ambiguous, so I may clarify them as well.

 

Kim Young Woo / 201203937 / Narrative Comp Tues/ Plan for Revising

1. Describe your own reaction to conducting this interview. Was it easy or difficult? Why? If you had a chance to do the interview over, what would you do differently?

The interview was actually easy for me. Perhaps it was because he was a very close friend of mine, and I felt very comfortable to ask him whatever I wanted without having to worry about whether I was being to insensitive or personal. If i had the chance to do the interview questions, I would focus more on the questions that I had no idea about. What I mean by this is that, I already knew some of the things about his situation, but for the sake of the interview I realized that I was asking him questions that I already knew the answers too.

2. Read your essay aloud and listen to the sound of the words. If possible, audiotape your reading and then listen to the tape. What did you like the most about the essay when you heard it being read aloud in your own voice?

It seemed like I was telling a story about someone's real life. Also, I was able to hear the flow of the transition of the interview. I personally didn't like hearing it from my own voice, but it allowed me to hear all the errors in grammar and sentences that could use revision.

3. What else do you want readers to understand that is not yet included in your essay? Write out these new parts and decide how you can include them in the next draft to make your essay more complete.

I will try to elaborate more on what he learned from his experience in prison and also how he came to peace with himself with the friend who got him there in the first place. I will try to incorporate this part towards the last paragraph. Also, I would want to add a little more about the details of living in prison. I would add this in the part where he explained about the bird bath.

Changyu Kang/Ch.5 Essay Revision Plan/Narrative Composition(2) Tuesday & 09:00~11:00

1. Describe your own reaction to conducting this interview. Was it easy or difficult? Why? If you had a chance to do the interview over, what would you do differently? It was difficult because what interviewee said was different from what I had thought. Before interview, I made a hypothesis in addition to a series of question and it turned out to be wrong. Of course since it is just personal hypothesis, it might be wrong. But I think I didn't deal with the situation appropriately. If I had a chance to do the interview again, I will prepare several questions in case the situation which is different from my expectation. 2. Read your essay aloud and listen to the sound of the words. If possible, audiotape your reading and then listen to the tape. What did you like most about the essay when you heard it being read aloud in your own voice? First, I like the place we met. I proposed a bar to interviewee which made us feel comfortable and I think it made she answered my question honestly. And I also like the fact that I made a hypothesis before the interview. I think it gives interviewer a direction to the interview. In my situation, although I couldn't deal with the situation it was wrong, I still think it is way better than just throwing prepared question.   3. What else do you want readers to understand that is not yet included in your essay? Write out these new parts and decide how you can include them in the next draft to make your essay more complete. What I want to include my final draft is about inconvenient moments when she use smartphone. She generally content with smartphone services. She content with various contents and speed of smartphone, LTE service in this case. But she said it was very annoying whenever smartphone got loading. When she reads webtoons or watches video through smartphone, which is very often because she is 'smartphone dukhu', she can't endure even a momentary loading time. This fact was very interesting to me so I am going to include my final draft.

Kweonho Lee/ Plans for Revision/ Narrative Composition/Tues. 9-11 a.m

1. Describe your own reaction to conducting this interview. Was it easy or difficult? Why? If you had a chance to do the interview over, what would you do differently? Conducting this interview was not easy because it was awkward for me to interview my family member. Because we always had informal, daily conversations when we met, asking some formal questions was not familiar my grandma and me. However, we soon got used to it after a few minutes. If I had a chance to do the interview over, I would focus on some other aspects in the interviewee's life. Instead of focusing on her present life, asking about her childhood which is about half a century ago, would also be interesting to the readers. 2. Read your essay aloud and listen to the sound of the words. If possible, audiotape your reading and then listen to the tape. What did you like most about the essay when you heard it being read aloud in your own voice?  What I liked about my essay was that the quotations were vivid. Before reading aloud in my own voice, I did not know whether my quotations were specific and appropriate or not. However, after reading them aloud, they seemed vivid enough to make me recall the memories of conducting the interview.   3. What else do you want readers to understand that is not yet included in your essay? Write out these new parts and decide how you can include them in the next draft to make your essay more complete.  I'm considering adding some more information about my grandpa. Through the quotations, my grandma tells me that he was a dedicated, kind man but I didn't include enough information to help the readers understand his characters.  Actually he had a poor childhood. He lost his parents from The Korean War and had lived in Seoul with his little brothers. Since he had to take care of his brothers, he started working in the bank at an early age. He worked really hard and he was able to become a manager of the bank branch. Then, he met my grandma and married her. Because they had a big family with 3 daughters and a son my grandpa had to work hard to earn money for his family. He spent most of the days working in the bank.  I think I can include this information in the part where I introduce my grandpa briefly. It will effectively explain why my grandma loved him and missed him so much and thus make my interview more complete. 201202334 Kweonho Lee

Choi, Won-joon/ Plans for Revision/ Narrative Composition/Tues. 9-11 a.m

1. Describe your own reaction to conducting this interview. Was it easy or difficult? Why? If you had a chance to do the interview over, what would you do differently?

The interviewee was my friend Dong-cheol. So, it was really comfortable to conduct the interview but before long I came to know that this coziness could be a problem. While interviewing, my friend and I talked about other things regardless of the main subject of the interview. We talked about other friends, school works and information about part-time jobs, and so on. Additionally, as Dong-cheol did not concentrate on the interview, he answered in short words to my questions again and again. So, I had to question about more details repeatedly and try to draw his personal stories. If I were to do it again, I would let him know that this is my interview that is really important not only for my life in Iran but this Interview Assignment in Chapter 5. Then maybe I can expect his seriousness and sincerity toward the interview.

 

2. Read your essay aloud and listen to the sound of the words. If possible, audiotape your reading and then listen to the tape. What did you like most about the essay when you heard it being read aloud in your own voice?

 I liked the sentences with quotation marks, especially this part: "Congratulations! Won-joon, you're going to Iran next year!" I know that indirect quotations are also essential when writing down the spoken languages that had been interviewed. However, while reading my first draft, I felt the direct quotations are more understandable and interesting.

 

3. What else do you want readers to understand that is not yet included in your essay? Write out these new parts and decide how you can include them in the next draft to make your essay more complete.

When revising my draft, I'd like to add the description of Dong-cheol's reactions while talking. I'd like to describe and show his feelings through his facial expressions or behaviors and I won't just tell them to the reader. Detailed writing must be required when doing this.

Furthermore, I came up with other important questions that I didn't ask the interviewee. And those questions are not the questions that could be answered by him. So, I conducted an additional interview with another friend who is now in Tehran for his study. I couldn't but interview him through mobile phone, so I couldn't see his face or feel the atmosphere he was taking the interview. However, his lively experiences and anecdotes were so interesting that I want to add these contents into the next draft. 

KIMHYUNJEE/Plans for Revision/ Narrative Composition/Tues. 9-11 a.m

1. Describe your own reaction to conducting this interview. Was it easy or difficult? Why? If you had a chance to do the interview over, what would you do differently?

 

As I expected before, the interview was difficult for me. I interviewed my mom and it was difficult for me to come up with interview questions. I wanted the interview questions to connect one and another, and it was difficult to do it at first.

The only thing I would do differently next time is to have a voice recorder or something to (later) check if I missed any information.

 

2. Read your essay aloud and listen to the sound of the words. If possible, audiotape your reading and then listen to the tape. What did you like most about the essay when you heard it being read aloud in your own voice?

 

Although it feels weird reading it out loud,  I found grammar mistakes that I didn't notice before.  There were actually a lot of them. By reading, it made me think twice whether my grammar is correct.

 

3. What else do you want readers to understand that is not yet included in your essay? Write out these new parts and decide how you can include them in the next draft to make your essay more complete.

 

I think in the next draft, I want to add my mom's emotional stage. Reading it now, I noticed that I forgot to mention her emotions. Specifically, I want to add what my mom felt when she was compared to her brothers and her current emotional stage (how she feels now looking back). By including descriptions of her emotional stage, I think the readers will have a better understanding about my interview/mom.

Yousun Jung/Plan for revision/Tue 9-11a.m

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1. Describe your own reaction to conducting this interview. Was it easy or difficult? Why? If you had a chance to do the interview over, what would you do differently?

I found it was much more difficult than I just had imagined. First, it was difficult to come up with the questions to make a narrative flow. I learned that I need some information about the interviewee before the interview. I never knew that I didn't know much about my grandma. If I do it again, I would ask about my grandma to her sister, my mom, and my uncles before I interview her.

 

2. Read your essay aloud and listen to the sound of the words. If possible, audiotape your reading and then listen to the tape. What did you like most about the essay when you heard it being read aloud in your own voice?

  I feel weird whenever I hear my recorded voice. It is different with what I know as my voice. I once heard that what I hear is the voice which already vibrated inside my body, therefore it is different with my real voice. Even though it sounds weird, I could find some of missed articles and awkward expressions. If I repeat this, it would be better to some extent.

 

3. What else do you want readers to understand that is not yet included in your essay? Write out these new parts and decide how you can include them in the next draft to make your essay more complete.

  I couldn't add about my mom. My mom used to say that her mother—my grandma— was not caring mom for her. She started to work in her early days, and she tried really hard. At the same time, my grandma also struggled her life. Both had no time to take a look at each other, but my mum felt sad when she looked back her past, especially comparing with other moms of her friends. It was a big topic for me, but I didn't know how to put it in a constant flow, without distraction.

Yousun Jung

 

Alyssa Yoo/ Plans for Revision/ Narrative Composition/Tues. 9-11 a.m

1. Conducting this interview was difficult because I had to come up with questions on my own and at first, I did not know what kind of questions I would ask to my father. I think I had a good start because I knew my dad to some point. If I could do the interview over, I'd ask him about his opinion on some topics more in detail. I think I asked questions that led to on the surface answers. 

2. I actually liked the last part of my essay when I read it out loud. Although I think I should make a few changes to my ending, I liked the way it sounded with a couple of direct quotes from my dad. I liked the quotes I got from my dad, but I think I can do better on the description and details of the interview setting. 

3. I should add more details about how many jobs my father had and how he never showed that he was stressed out about it in front of my mother and me. That way, I think my essay can be more dramatic. Also, I should add more details on how busy he was at his work in Korea and let readers feel that he really didn't like his job. From what I have now in my essay, it doesn't really feel like my dad had a hard time because I left out some of the details to make it short. I should reorganize my essay to make it so that none of the details are left out while at the same time, it's not too long and boring. There's actually a lot of revising to do for my essay. Also, I can combine some of the sentences to be less redundant. I do not have a strong message delivered to readers. When I rewrite my essay, I need to put in a message.