1. Conducting this interview was difficult because I had to come up with questions on my own and at first, I did not know what kind of questions I would ask to my father. I think I had a good start because I knew my dad to some point. If I could do the interview over, I'd ask him about his opinion on some topics more in detail. I think I asked questions that led to on the surface answers.
2. I actually liked the last part of my essay when I read it out loud. Although I think I should make a few changes to my ending, I liked the way it sounded with a couple of direct quotes from my dad. I liked the quotes I got from my dad, but I think I can do better on the description and details of the interview setting.
3. I should add more details about how many jobs my father had and how he never showed that he was stressed out about it in front of my mother and me. That way, I think my essay can be more dramatic. Also, I should add more details on how busy he was at his work in Korea and let readers feel that he really didn't like his job. From what I have now in my essay, it doesn't really feel like my dad had a hard time because I left out some of the details to make it short. I should reorganize my essay to make it so that none of the details are left out while at the same time, it's not too long and boring. There's actually a lot of revising to do for my essay. Also, I can combine some of the sentences to be less redundant. I do not have a strong message delivered to readers. When I rewrite my essay, I need to put in a message.
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